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talbaineric

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Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 20:49

I'm not a Photoshop pro yet,but I'm getting there. And this is my first professional actual PS pic.

If you could guys could take the time to look this over and tell me what you think. I'd really appreciate it.

I got a good response from the SRK.com art gallery forum,and I want my fellow MMCafe members opinons' now.

It's of Talbain on a magazine cover. I did everything myself. Yes. And I know..........Dr.Baghead told me this.......lens flares are overrated......but I felt I needed something shiny for the pic.

Well........here we are:

Talbain's magazine debut!

Anyway,here's some more fan art:

Nakoruru
Rose
Karin

Replies:

Fro Boy11

574th Post

New Red Carpet Member

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 20:55

I like the Lycanthrope Monthly idea, but I think there should be more in the background. Maybe the moon or something? Other than that, I have nothing bad to say about it. Keep it up!

As for the fan art. I like the Rose art. The Nakoruru one is cool, too. I also like Karin, she looks kinda like a doll. I don't know what it is, but to me she has a plastic look to her.

Luisinan
20th Post

New Customer

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 21:19

The magazine cover is pretty good. You cropped Talbain well and you placed the text real well also. Only problems I have with it is the lack of a back ground.It might have been better if you just used a solid white background and cropped Talbain more into the cover or added a second DS character on the left. Also the text is too small, I know that the pic is not the actual size of a real cover but its too small. Other thing, maybe you could have darkened Talbain, he looks a bit faded, so does the magazine title. Otherwise its good- you know what your doing. Oh, but no more lensflare dude!

The fanart is great. Liked Nakaruru the best.

talbaineric

3499th Post

Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Re(2):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 21:22

Thanks guys! Glad you like! And yes,thanks for the critiques!

No more lens flares.

Yes,everyone loved Nakoruru!

And here's another two:

Cammy's Greetings from London!
For any fans,Danger Mouse!

Satoshi Miwa

1171th Post

Red Carpet Premium Member+

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 21:34

Not a bad first try, but some general comments...

1) The Magazine title is much too plain, and doesn't stand out. This would get lost on a shelf easily, despite the pic standing out. So some work on it would be suggested to get it to the "stands out, but isn't gawdy phase".

2) The bottom text, "Big Bad Alpha in Charge" blends in way to easily to the pic, thus making it hard to read. Might be a resolution issue, but something that needs to be corrected.

3) This needs a background, badly. Too much wasted space for the pose. Don't need anything stand outish, but it does need it.

4) Get rid of the top lens effects, as they just attract the eye to empty space. In fact they distract from the pciture. The hand effect is cool, though, and is nicely done...

Other than that, good job. I doubt I could do that with Photoshop...:)

Freeter

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Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Sun 23 Jun 23:41

The bottomleft text should stand out from the background. If it's a similar color it becomes harder to see.

Too much space in the center, move Talbain so he takes up more of the cover. That or add a background image.

Add some drop shadow to the "Jon Talbain" text and the subtitle so they stand out.

Taa kun
213th Post

Frequent Customer

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 01:41

Good, really good, but I will add the usual remarks :
Too much space in the center.
The text color is too much near the background color (which is a bit too close to Talbain's colors for me...)
The texts are a bit small.

About the arts, really nice.
I like the Rose one, but your katakana are bad written...
And I can't link to the two you posted later...

Tsukurimashou... Tsukurimashou...
Sate sate nani ga dekiru ka na ?

Time Mage

651th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 02:28

OK, I'm not going to be as critic as the rest because in fact... I like it very much!(lens flares included). Maybe it's because I compare it with my sucky ability, but I found it great.
Oh! The Nakoruru drawing is great, too.

hasukii

340th Post

Bronze Customer

"ermmmm honestly ..... ^^;" , posted Mon 24 Jun 05:19

its not bad .. but i think u should add some cutiez there ( pls , not SEX DOES SELL thing .. just some cute characters there .. its gonna be all right )... ^^;

Ultraman Jack ( Hideki Goh ) : " Hyah ! Hyah !! Hyah !!! "

talbaineric

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Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Thanks guys!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 05:36

Thanks everyone!

Yes,I know,a few people have told me about space. What should I put there?

hasukii

341th Post

Bronze Customer

"Re(1):Thanks guys!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 05:53

u need to edit something though ...

" The Big Bad Alpha In Charge " this line .. the color need to re-edit a lil .. at some point the word is lil a bit confusing ...

again , the page need a lil design though .. not like try to make it EYE CANDY ( yes , eye candy does sell .. if the content sucks , no matter what .. its a failure )
so , contents is absolutely the most important factor to be a good magazine . but also the design should be consider as well

Ultraman Jack ( Hideki Goh ) : " Hyah ! Hyah !! Hyah !!! "

Daala

470th Post

Gold Customer

"Re(1):Thanks guys!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 10:49

good job on the images. So when do you leave? I wanna go over there myself in sept. ^_^

Dr Baghead

1165th Post

Red Carpet Premium Member+

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Mon 24 Jun 21:50

You need to move Talbain over... he should be the focus of the cover, as it is he's tucked away in the corner and not really demanding the attention he needs

instead of a lense flare (which would be passable if ol' JT was in the middle), try a gradiant or playing with some other filters, I could explain how to do one of those cool anime "speed line burst" for you if you'd like...

the other 3 pictures are very nice, Karin was especially neat...

Radish
40th Post

Rare Customer

"Re(2):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Tue 25 Jun 10:54

It looks good, although I'm definitely in the 'lens flares are highly over-rated' camp. It also looks like there's a bit too much dead space in the middle of the cover. I would suggest increasing the size of the stories' fonts, maybe even having the top story larger that the rest to fill in up.

Tashoku Kisune

765th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member+

"Honesty!" , posted Tue 25 Jun 12:43

I think you did a good job. You have a wonderful eye for colour. ^_^ You've done a wonderful job.. I like it a lot. ^_~

The only improvement I can think of.. isn't really necessary at all. You could try something with much darker shadows, give it tons more contrast! That would make it breath takingly stunning!

talbaineric

3505th Post

Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Re(1):Honesty!" , posted Tue 25 Jun 15:36

Thanks again guys!

T.K.: Nice to see you again.

Daala: WHEEEEEEEEEE!!!! I leave next week!!!!!!!!!!

Shin ATproof

680th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member

"Re(2):Honesty!" , posted Tue 25 Jun 16:06

1)The cover looks pretty good. But it's kinda bland...I feel there is something missing. Try to add some more graphics/pictuers to it...make it "chunky" and fill in that space so it's more of a eye catcher.

2)Artwork is still good...I especially like that Kawaii Nakoruru ^_^

Keep up the good work homie!

RugalBernstein

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Platinum Carpet V.I.P- Board Master

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Tue 25 Jun 17:50

How unique. ^_^ The cover could be a bit more flashy, though.

Tashoku Kisune

776th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member+

"Re(2):Honesty!" , posted Wed 26 Jun 13:35

[quote
Thanks again guys!

T.K.: Nice to see you again.

Daala: WHEEEEEEEEEE!!!! I leave next week!!!!!!!!!!

Awww... I'm gonna miss you, Tal!! <sniffles>

NARUTO

622th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member

"really good." , posted Wed 26 Jun 22:56

Making his own magazine is not the easiest thing I know....and it seems you've doing it well.
Good job T.E, since everybody already said that needs to, I only can say, keep on going, you're on the good way.

Don't be afraid if you firsts number are not perfect you need to learn those things but I can tell you that if you keep this way, in 2 or 3 issue, your mag will be OK.

Just be patient.

Tashoku Kisune

778th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member+

"Re(1):really good." , posted Thu 27 Jun 12:51

I know this probably won't happen.. but you can sign me up for any sort of help you want or need. Honestly! ^_^ Though I have this creeping suspicion that I won't hear that from you. You're a really decent artist and all... so I'm not sure that I really COULD really lend much of a hand.. merely ideas or suggestions. o_O Maybe a second opinion. But if you feel like it.. just drop things by me. If not.. that's cool.. ;p

Suichi
51th Post

Occasional Customer

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Thu 27 Jun 18:57

I think if you move Talbain over towards the middle more, just barely off center, and gave it a background, It'd be great. A rooftop silloutte with the moon in the background would be really cool and make for a dark picture. With the text in white, it'll stand out better and be more easily read. Just make sure to make Talbain dark as well, or it'll look cheesy.

Plus if you use a more Serrif font for the title, it might look better and be more appealing to the eye.

--Suichi

Suichi
52th Post

Occasional Customer

"Re(2):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Thu 27 Jun 19:05

Oops!

I just noticed the Karin picture. Her lower leg has one major problem. If her shoe is pointing in one perspective direction, then where's her anklet pointing?

It almost looks like her ankle is broken. The difference in perspective is just too wierd to overlook. Otherwise, it's a great picture. The small pinpoint highlights do make her look kinda plastic, but your pencils always seemed to be superior to your coloring.

I'd really like to see what you could do if you injected a little bit of sharp angles into your somewhat round style. I think you'd add a nice combo of clarity and texture to your art.

--Suichi

Ted

658th Post

Red Carpet Regular Member

"Re(1):Please guys! Be honest!" , posted Fri 28 Jun 08:31

Good Stuff man!
WHo cares if you get bad reviews.......
show them how wrong they are........

CRAM IT DOWN THEYRE THROATS!!!!

Play TED on Kawaks or Kalliera!
just Look me up online or Post a CHallage!